Sick Sentences

These are the original sick sentences. 

The man walked up the slope. He used poles. The sun was bright. The sky was blue. He looked forward to the view from the top

Here are mine.

The man heaved his heavy boot into the the thick layer of white snow. He thew his poles in the snow as he looked up at the journey above him. The sun was beaming in his eyes as he looked up. The sky was a beautiful blue. He was biting his tongue in anticipation for he could see the top.